Essay 2

   I want to share my writing process and my questions about essay 2. My article is “Has Privacy Become a Luxury Good”. At first, I finished my summary. And then, I was thinking that which pattern was more suitable for me. After compared the three different pattern, I decided to choose the first one. Then I used many ways like brainstorm and freewriting to explore my ideas of the response. Later, I started to write my first draft. But after I finished it, I thought my essay had a lot of problems. First, some sentences were really confusing. Secondly, I thought my essay was a mess because I lack of the clear topic sentence. Thirdly, my transitional link with my thesis was too simple. So, I made some changes in my draft two. I changed my pattern to express some sentences. I used more condensed words in my topic sentence. I added more information between the summary and the response relatively. But I still have some questions about essay two. I wonder know what I should do to make my transitional link more nature. At the same time, I want to know which conclusion is a good conclusion. Do I need to summarize every important points of my precious paragraphs? And do I need to write a topic sentence for each different paragraphs? Is it ok to write one topic sentence in front of all my examples? Besides, what should I do to make my essay become more interesting?